I was nine years old, in 4th grade. I had a week of for Christmas, so my family decided to have a vacation to Da Nang, I was very excited, I always excited whenever I have a vacation. We went to a five star hotel “The Nam Hai” and I think it’s not in Da Nang, just near it, it’s in Hoi An The prize is very expensive, cause it’s a five star hotel, it’s very big.
I think the prize for each room is about $450. But it worths it, the service is very awesome, each villar has a swimming pool, a dining room, and a kitchen, we can drinks all the coke, beer, whatever drink they have in the fridge for free. In the room, there’s a massage bath, each room even have an own ipod. I love the service here. Everything there is good. So I spend like 1 to 2 hours staying at my room and the villar. I even called a transport car, a car that helped people to get fro mthe lobby to their room because the hotel is very big, I had a trip around the hotel, I discovered that there’s also club, spa, free computer wifi rooms, billards, bar, etc. But 1 thing that I don’t really like about this hotel is when it’s evening, the way that people walk or drive to the lobby it’s very very dark, and I don’t like dark.
In the afternoon, after I had a flight from HCM city to here, and running around the hotel, I rest for about 30 minutes, and then I swim at the villar, as I say, each villar has it’s own swimming pool, that’s the best part. I swim with my brother, and my cousin. It was very fun I swim very very much, that explains why I have dark skin. While swimming, I have a very wild joke to my brother, I push him to the water, about 3 seconds, that make him can breath, after he rise up, he cried alot, and screamed at me. So I got punished for not going out of my room for 15 minutes, but still, that’s pretty fun, after the punishment, I continue swimming.
My parents and my uncle told me and my cousin to go to the beach, at first, I and my brothers don’t wanna go, so everyone leave both of us here, we felt alone, so we chase after them. While running to the beach, the wind here is very strong, so it blew the sand to everyone’s leg that probably felt very itchy.
When we’re down at the beach, I turn my head down and see, I suddenly know that the water here is very clean; it’s very clean that I can see my leg while standing. We start to go away from the seashore, and we go to a far enough place to swim, but I think that the water depth here is not so deep, and I think if the water is too deep, I can swim back easily, like what I’ve done in the swimming pool, I wanna show off, so I start to go a little further, and further, my uncle saw me, and told me “Hey, don’t go too far, or else you would get a cramp and sink the water.” Well, my mouth said yes, but my brain doesn’t do what my mouth say, so I just keep going further, and further, I went very far, that when I stood by my tiptoes, the water still over my nose, suddenly, I got a cramp, I fell down to the water, about 5 seconds, and then stood up, It was very hurts, I can swim back, it got even hurter, I scream “Heeeeeelp”, then I fell down, luckk for me, my uncle save me.
I faint for 10 minutes, then I woke up and saw me lieing at the sand with bunch of people surrounds me. I then felt very bad, and I apologized to my uncle.He warned me not to go far, but I didn’t listen to him, so this is the consequences I got. I then realize that “Don’t underestimate something eventhough it looks normal in the outside, and always listen to your parents and everyone in your family.”
we went to the resort not hotel. :P
Trả lờiXóaand it wasnt christmas, i think so.
Sounds like a lot of fun Peter. The end is very good. It's an thrilling and frightening story. However the beginning about the resort is unneeded. You should work on writing a better hook in the beginning and also describe more about getting the cramp and about how you felt. Also tell us more about the characters. What is your uncle like?
Trả lờiXóaWell done Peter. You did a pretty good job on describe a place you lived near Da Nang. I also agreed with Athrun, it is resort, not hotel. Because hotel doesn't have anythings called "villa". And you need to check your grammar. Ex: "Well, my mouth said yes, but my brain doesn’t do what my mouth say"
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